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you are not the first to wear
the same beckoning, calling skin
your fine edges annulling my roots,
       and i don’t think you were the first to
Kill.

    Kill what once was
    a ticking pocket watch, an echo
    heard only by one
    now ticking for fallen ears.

It does hurt to see things die,
but there is a certain satisfaction
In having washed hands
everything is painful when everything is at stake
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Given 2018-06-08
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LindArtz Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2018  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very nicely done!!
Congratulations on your much deserved DD!  :)
Congrats on DD By Marphilhearts by LindArtz
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oliviacolomar Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2018  Student Writer
thank you so much!
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StudioRhapsody Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2018  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love it. I love that it's short. VERY effective! Chills! Gack. 
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oliviacolomar Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2018  Student Writer
glad to hear it resonated w/ you
thank you!
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Quickstrike9 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
I like it a lot. I wish it was longer. See it fall deeper into dark thoughts.
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oliviacolomar Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2018  Student Writer
thank you! personally i feel like the last stanza is so much better and so disjointed from the rest of the piece, but i couldnt think of any way to improve the flow. i wonder if you can see that?
dont want more of this. its tuff dude
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Quickstrike9 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
It felt more like you just felt the need to end it. A few more verses would even it out but it's hard to go back and add things in. I tend to go with a bit of a first-draft policy on poems.
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oliviacolomar Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2018  Student Writer
well now its a DD im shocked --- so maybe its good the way it is
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Quickstrike9 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats!
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oliviacolomar Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2018  Student Writer
thank you!!!!!!!!!!!
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner May 28, 2018
Damn, this poem gives me chills!
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oliviacolomar Featured By Owner May 28, 2018  Student Writer
<3 
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner May 25, 2018   Writer
i don't think you were the first to kill

gave me chills
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oliviacolomar Featured By Owner May 25, 2018  Student Writer
stings, doesnt it
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